雅思小作文 ,请求高人指点,最好能给个评分,急考,谢谢~

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热心网友 时间：2023-11-18 03:31

HELLO, I've sat more than 50 IELTS test sessions. Using my past experience, you are most likely to get band 5.5 or 6.(www.jnkw123.com)

The first bar chart illustrates the main causes for study on the basis of the age of students.
It is obviously indicated that there are great differences among students from under 26 to over 49 in motivations for study. The figures in the first bar chart show that only 10% of students under 26 study by interest by contrast with 70% of students over 49 do so, Thus it can be inferred that people are more likely to study by their interests with age.追问那你知道开头段怎么加吗？是否有必要加开头段 ，还是目前这样就可以接受？
BY THE WAY: The figures in the first bar chart show that only 10% of students under 26 study（应为STUDYING？） by interest by contrast with 70% of students over 49 do（DOING？） so,
我感觉我写的这篇小作文是不是太过笼统了，只介绍了大概趋势，缺少对变化的细节描述？请根据你的经验判断一下我说的对吗？

热心网友 时间：2023-11-18 03:31

应该有个开头段 两个图总说~
不应该直接开始写第一个图怎么样怎么样的

热心网友 时间：2023-11-18 03:31

HELLO, I've sat more than 50 IELTS test sessions. Using my past experience, you are most likely to get band 5.5 or 6.(www.jnkw123.com)

The first bar chart illustrates the main causes for study on the basis of the age of students.
It is obviously indicated that there are great differences among students from under 26 to over 49 in motivations for study. The figures in the first bar chart show that only 10% of students under 26 study by interest by contrast with 70% of students over 49 do so, Thus it can be inferred that people are more likely to study by their interests with age.追问那你知道开头段怎么加吗？是否有必要加开头段 ，还是目前这样就可以接受？
BY THE WAY: The figures in the first bar chart show that only 10% of students under 26 study（应为STUDYING？） by interest by contrast with 70% of students over 49 do（DOING？） so,
我感觉我写的这篇小作文是不是太过笼统了，只介绍了大概趋势，缺少对变化的细节描述？请根据你的经验判断一下我说的对吗？

热心网友 时间：2023-12-10 04:28

HELLO, I've sat more than 50 IELTS test sessions. Using my past experience, you are most likely to get band 5.5 or 6.(www.jnkw123.com)

The first bar chart illustrates the main causes for study on the basis of the age of students.
It is obviously indicated that there are great differences among students from under 26 to over 49 in motivations for study. The figures in the first bar chart show that only 10% of students under 26 study by interest by contrast with 70% of students over 49 do so, Thus it can be inferred that people are more likely to study by their interests with age.追问那你知道开头段怎么加吗？是否有必要加开头段 ，还是目前这样就可以接受？
BY THE WAY: The figures in the first bar chart show that only 10% of students under 26 study（应为STUDYING？） by interest by contrast with 70% of students over 49 do（DOING？） so,
我感觉我写的这篇小作文是不是太过笼统了，只介绍了大概趋势，缺少对变化的细节描述？请根据你的经验判断一下我说的对吗？

热心网友 时间：2023-12-10 04:29

应该有个开头段 两个图总说~
不应该直接开始写第一个图怎么样怎么样的

热心网友 时间：2023-11-18 03:31

HELLO, I've sat more than 50 IELTS test sessions. Using my past experience, you are most likely to get band 5.5 or 6.(www.jnkw123.com)

The first bar chart illustrates the main causes for study on the basis of the age of students.
It is obviously indicated that there are great differences among students from under 26 to over 49 in motivations for study. The figures in the first bar chart show that only 10% of students under 26 study by interest by contrast with 70% of students over 49 do so, Thus it can be inferred that people are more likely to study by their interests with age.追问那你知道开头段怎么加吗？是否有必要加开头段 ，还是目前这样就可以接受？
BY THE WAY: The figures in the first bar chart show that only 10% of students under 26 study（应为STUDYING？） by interest by contrast with 70% of students over 49 do（DOING？） so,
我感觉我写的这篇小作文是不是太过笼统了，只介绍了大概趋势，缺少对变化的细节描述？请根据你的经验判断一下我说的对吗？

热心网友 时间：2023-11-18 03:31

应该有个开头段 两个图总说~
不应该直接开始写第一个图怎么样怎么样的

热心网友 时间：2023-11-18 03:31

应该有个开头段 两个图总说~
不应该直接开始写第一个图怎么样怎么样的

热心网友 时间：2023-11-18 03:31

HELLO, I've sat more than 50 IELTS test sessions. Using my past experience, you are most likely to get band 5.5 or 6.(www.jnkw123.com)

The first bar chart illustrates the main causes for study on the basis of the age of students.
It is obviously indicated that there are great differences among students from under 26 to over 49 in motivations for study. The figures in the first bar chart show that only 10% of students under 26 study by interest by contrast with 70% of students over 49 do so, Thus it can be inferred that people are more likely to study by their interests with age.追问那你知道开头段怎么加吗？是否有必要加开头段 ，还是目前这样就可以接受？
BY THE WAY: The figures in the first bar chart show that only 10% of students under 26 study（应为STUDYING？） by interest by contrast with 70% of students over 49 do（DOING？） so,
我感觉我写的这篇小作文是不是太过笼统了，只介绍了大概趋势，缺少对变化的细节描述？请根据你的经验判断一下我说的对吗？

热心网友 时间：2023-11-18 03:31

HELLO, I've sat more than 50 IELTS test sessions. Using my past experience, you are most likely to get band 5.5 or 6.(www.jnkw123.com)

The first bar chart illustrates the main causes for study on the basis of the age of students.
It is obviously indicated that there are great differences among students from under 26 to over 49 in motivations for study. The figures in the first bar chart show that only 10% of students under 26 study by interest by contrast with 70% of students over 49 do so, Thus it can be inferred that people are more likely to study by their interests with age.追问那你知道开头段怎么加吗？是否有必要加开头段 ，还是目前这样就可以接受？
BY THE WAY: The figures in the first bar chart show that only 10% of students under 26 study（应为STUDYING？） by interest by contrast with 70% of students over 49 do（DOING？） so,
我感觉我写的这篇小作文是不是太过笼统了，只介绍了大概趋势，缺少对变化的细节描述？请根据你的经验判断一下我说的对吗？

热心网友 时间：2023-11-18 03:31

应该有个开头段 两个图总说~
不应该直接开始写第一个图怎么样怎么样的

热心网友 时间：2023-11-18 03:31

HELLO, I've sat more than 50 IELTS test sessions. Using my past experience, you are most likely to get band 5.5 or 6.(www.jnkw123.com)

The first bar chart illustrates the main causes for study on the basis of the age of students.
It is obviously indicated that there are great differences among students from under 26 to over 49 in motivations for study. The figures in the first bar chart show that only 10% of students under 26 study by interest by contrast with 70% of students over 49 do so, Thus it can be inferred that people are more likely to study by their interests with age.追问那你知道开头段怎么加吗？是否有必要加开头段 ，还是目前这样就可以接受？
BY THE WAY: The figures in the first bar chart show that only 10% of students under 26 study（应为STUDYING？） by interest by contrast with 70% of students over 49 do（DOING？） so,
我感觉我写的这篇小作文是不是太过笼统了，只介绍了大概趋势，缺少对变化的细节描述？请根据你的经验判断一下我说的对吗？

热心网友 时间：2023-11-18 03:31

应该有个开头段 两个图总说~
不应该直接开始写第一个图怎么样怎么样的

热心网友 时间：2023-11-18 03:31

应该有个开头段 两个图总说~
不应该直接开始写第一个图怎么样怎么样的

热心网友 时间：2023-11-18 03:31

HELLO, I've sat more than 50 IELTS test sessions. Using my past experience, you are most likely to get band 5.5 or 6.(www.jnkw123.com)

The first bar chart illustrates the main causes for study on the basis of the age of students.
It is obviously indicated that there are great differences among students from under 26 to over 49 in motivations for study. The figures in the first bar chart show that only 10% of students under 26 study by interest by contrast with 70% of students over 49 do so, Thus it can be inferred that people are more likely to study by their interests with age.追问那你知道开头段怎么加吗？是否有必要加开头段 ，还是目前这样就可以接受？
BY THE WAY: The figures in the first bar chart show that only 10% of students under 26 study（应为STUDYING？） by interest by contrast with 70% of students over 49 do（DOING？） so,
我感觉我写的这篇小作文是不是太过笼统了，只介绍了大概趋势，缺少对变化的细节描述？请根据你的经验判断一下我说的对吗？

热心网友 时间：2023-11-18 03:31

应该有个开头段 两个图总说~
不应该直接开始写第一个图怎么样怎么样的