英语高手帮我批改一下英语作文（高考总分30分）3

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热心网友时间：2024-12-05 01:48

The result of the survey⑴ show that the majority of students disagree to this kind of practice⑵; they think⑶, they can check the right answers after finishing their exercise⑷. In this way, they can correct mistakes⑸ the first time⑹. Most importantly⑺, it is useful to improve learning efficiency⑻, which can help them gain better coals⑼.
On the hand⑾, about one-fifth of students agree to it⑾. They hold the view⑿ that it is necessary to stop students from copying answers. By doing it, they can think⒀ for themselves, which aims to strength conference⒁. In my opinion, I fully agree to it, because it can force us to develop a good attitude, which plays an important role in our studying life. Besides, we can make greet progress in short time if we stick to checking right answers⒂ the first time⒃ when we finish exercise⒄
⑴ survey 指勘查、综览，似乎用investigation更妥帖一些。
⑵ this kind of practice：this 用在这里指的是一种已知的practice，后面需要跟一个*性定语，
⑶ they think：要么用they think that宾语从句，要么把它变为插入语： They can, they think, check…或者直接放在句尾。
⑷ 改为复数 their exercises。
⑸ correct mistakes：改为correct their mistakes themselves。
⑹ (for) the first time指第一次，而非第一时间，改为从句when they are going over what they have done.
⑺ Most importantly：表示“更…的是”要用the + 形容词最高级 + of it is that，所以此处应改为 the most important (of it is that), 不可以用副词。
⑻ learning efficiency：前面加 their。
⑼ gain better coals： goals写错了，另外goal不可以gain（获得），而是达到，改为arrive at、come to、get to或者reach。
⑽ On the hand改为On the other hand
⑾ about one-fifth of students agree to it本身没有语法错误，不过总觉得有些平平，不吸引阅卷老师的眼球，是否改为 there are about one-fifth of students agreeing to it
⑿ They hold the view改为 They stick to a poit of view。
⒀ they can think for themselves句子一般化，改为, they are likely to get used to thinking for themselves。
⒁ which aims to strength conference 从字面上看不知所云，大概是想表达which will tend to help form self-centered habit and characteristics.
⒂ checking right answers改为distinguishing right from wrong answers
⒃ the first time 加介词at
⒄ when we finish exercise，改为when we have finished with our exercises

看来你的英语基础不错，大方面的错误不多，只是在修辞方面还需要进一步加强。另外注意写完后好好检查，特别是单复数、冠词、拼写等方面应该引起特别注意。

热心网友时间：2024-12-05 01:48

1.show改为shows
2.disagree to改为disagree with
3.they think后逗号去掉
4.exercise改为exercises
5.the first time前加for
6.on the hand改为on one hand
7.one-fifth后of去掉
8.agree to it改为agree with it
9.greet改为great
10.short time前加a
11.最后一句the first time改为once或者as soon as

热心网友时间：2024-12-05 01:48

The result of the survey (showS) that the majority of students (of students可以删去)disagree to this kind of practice; They think（, ）they can check the right answers after finishing their exercise（s）. In this way, they can correct mistakes the first time（需要一个介词at或其他）. Most importantly（不符合英语语言习惯）, it is useful to improve learning efficiency（是个名词改成副词）, which can help them gain better coals（这是社么意思？）.
On the （去掉the或加one）hand, about one-fifth of（去掉of） students agree to it. They hold the view that it is necessary to stop students from copying answers. By doing it（汉语式英语）, they can think for themselves（汉语式英语）, which aims to strength conference. In my opinion, I fully agree to it, because it can force us to develop a good attitude, which plays an important role in our studying life. Besides, we can make greet progress in short time if we stick to checking right answers the first time when we finish exercise

总体来说，思路比较清晰但意思表达不够明确特别是第二段on one hand...on another hand是并列的两个，第二段不够明确。有些语法错误，望多加揣摩，这里只是提出些建议，仅供参考！