帮忙修改一下 英文信件语法。高赏!
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发布时间:2022-04-30 16:13
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热心网友
时间:2022-06-27 04:45
原文:
"Your “End Canada’s License to Kill” Campaign is great. Thank you for caring about the seal hunt. However, the seal hunt provides a livelihood to thousands of coastal dwellers. These coastal dwellers supporting their families only rely on the seal procts.
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修改:
"seal hunt" 改成 "seal hunting"
"These coastal dwellers supporting" 改成 These coastal dwellers SUPPORT their families only BY the seal procts 或者
The costal dwellers' livings only rely on the seal procts
原文:
"However, you do not have to worry too much. The seal hunt is concted humanely. There are several rules that set up for all seal hunters. First, only six species of seals can be hunted, and baby seals can not be hunted. Second, the three-step process ensures that seals do not suffer unnecessarily (recommended by the Independent Veterinarians Working Group). Hunters must shoot or strike seals on the top of the cranium. After clubbing or shooting the seal, the hunter must check the animal’s eyes to ensure it is dead. If the seal is still alive, the hunter has to cut the animal’s main arteries immediately. These methods ensure the unconsciousness and a quick death of seals"
修改:
1.seal hunting
2."There are several rules that set up for" 改成 There are several rules that are set up for
3."a quick death of seals" 改成 "a quick death of a seal"
原文:
"As a result, the seals will not suffer a prolonged and painful death. Your understanding and support would be much appreciated. I hoped you could withdraw this campaign. Thank you for your consideration."
修改:
1."As a result, the seals will not suffer a prolonged and painful death" 改成 As a result, a seal will not,而且,我觉得你应该把这一句提到上面一段.
2. "I hoped you could withdraw "改成I hope you can withdraw
热心网友
时间:2022-06-27 04:46
Dear Sir or Madam:
Your “End Canada’s License to Kill” Campaign is great. Thank you for caring about the seal-hunter. However, the seal-hunter provides a livelihood to thousands of coastal inhabitants who raise their families only living by the seal procts.
However, it's unnecessary to worry seriously because the seal-hunter is humanely directed. There are several rules made for all seal hunters. Initially, seals can be hunted only including six species and the baby seals excluded . Moreover, the three-step process ensures that seals do not suffer unnecessarily (recommended by the Independent Veterinarians Working Group). Hunters must shoot or strike seals on the top of the cranium. After clubbing or shooting the seal, the hunter must check its eyes to ensure whether it is dead. If the seal is still alive, the hunter must cut the its main arteries immediately. it will make sure of an euthanasia of the seal.
As a result, the seals will not suffer a prolonged and painful death. Your comprehension and support would be highly appreciated. We hope you could consider and quit this campaign. Thank you!
Sincerely
The Department of Fisheries and Ocean
文中的英语太过于中文化,不过老外能看懂就行了。
热心网友
时间:2022-06-27 04:46
如果有数据支持你的观点应该会更有效. 我把捕杀
seal的三部曲细节删掉是因为我不觉得支持动物权益的人会像要知道捕杀的具体步骤.
We'd like to shed new light for you on the issue of seal hunting. Your campaign on "End Canada’s License to Kill”
is understandable and respected. However, seal hunting is a crucial source of income for thousands of coastal
dwellers. They have to rely on seal procts to provide for their families.
Moreover, there are several rules and regulations that have been established for the best interest of
preserving the seal population. First, only six species of seals can be hunted, and baby seals can not be hunted.
Second, seal hunting must be concted humanely. To ensure that seals do not suffer prolonged and painful
death, a three-step killing process, recommended by Independent Veterinarians Working Group, must be adopted
in seal hunting; otherwise, the hunters will lose their licenses.
Seal hunting is currently a controlled and regulated activity. Preserving seal population is also on our top agenda.
We do not promote unnecessary killing of seals. Your understanding and support would be much appreciated, because thousands of people's livelihoods are at stake. I hope you can withdraw this campaign. Thank you for your consideration.