优秀作文赏读---My Low-carbon Life
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时间：2023-10-11 02:01
提示要点：（1）每天步行上学；（2）节约水电，不需要的时候关掉电开关(turn off the lights)和水龙头(taps)；（3）充分使用纸张；（4）不适用塑料袋(plastic bags)……
要求：1. 词数：120词左右；
2. 不得出现真实的姓名、学校名等信息；
3. 文章内容包括所给提示内容，可适当发挥，文章的开头已经给出。
这种类型的写作要求我们不是没有遇到过。注意，我强调的是 “写作要求” ，就是说像上文这样，文章的主体部分都在 “提示要点” 中给我们列好，而且要求你们写的 “文章内容包括所给提示内容”，当然，你也 “可适当发挥” 。这句话的意思是：我给你的提示要点一个都不能少，还能发挥什么，那就是你自己的本事了。那么问题来了，有些同学（而且还是写作能力很不错的同学）的问题是发挥是尽情发挥了，但是要求必须在文章中提到的4个提示要点就挑着来写了。这样导致的后果就是，即便你发挥得再精彩，你依然是没有达到基本要求的。如果按一个提示要点2分算，你少写一个就可以扣你两分，不管你其他写得多么好，词汇句式多么高级，语法多么正确，你都很难拿到很高的分数，因为你犯了一个最不应该的错误：审题不认真！这个问题我上学期已经跟大家强调过，很明显，你们还没完全放在心上。
这样的写作要求，我认为对在写作内容方面比较薄弱的同学很友善的，开头给我们了，要点也都在那儿了，你一个一个按要求写下来，每个要点再用多一两个句子去解释扩充一下，最后再起一段总结一下，就是一篇很完整的文章了。即便没写出什么新意，但只要词汇短语句式恰当，没有明显的语法错误，拿个8分以上绰绰有余。在文章结构方面，因为你扩充不了太多内容，那你就把几个要点放在一段写，一篇总分总结构的文章就出来了。
而对于那些很能写的同学来说，每个点其实都可以用一些更具体的细节去拓展，而不是泛泛而谈，蜻蜓点水。可以在内容方面做到很详实的同学，每一个要点都能够独立成一段，这样子你就有足够的空间可以发挥，文章结构也会很清晰，只要没太多语法错误，逻辑能够自洽，那也一定会是高分作文。但是切记，除非你真的非常小心，不然写多错多这个坑真的很容易踩。
下面和大家分享的几篇作文，并不是一开始就能写得这么好的。作为考场作文，他们的原始版本也已经算是很不错的文章，但是最终分享出来的结果，还是经过了一定的修改，当然除了一些小的语法错误由我指出，其他如果是涉及作文框架或者内容的修改，主要还是靠他们自己，足见这些同学的写作水平。我们一起努力花时间改出来的作文，我希望大家每篇都要认真读几遍，这些作文拿出来，比网上很多所谓范文，还有一些作文书的范文还要好很多倍。好的文章是修改出来的，在每一次的修改和反思过程中，你的写作能力也会一点一点进步。希望大家多多阅读这些同学的优秀文章，推敲他们的写作思维和方式，在你自己的写作风格还没定型之前，你甚至可以模仿。勤读，勤积累，勤动笔，写作才能进步。
We have a lot of environmental problems these days. And there are actually many things we can do to make a big difference to the world.We can start from living a low carbon life.
For starters, the pollution from cars is becoming more and more serious. Instead of cars,we can go to school on foot or by bike. It is beneficial to the environment. It's also a perfect way to lose your weight.
Secondly, we should use clean energy like electricity. But everything shouldn't be wasted. I read an article yesterday. It said that there is a kind of corridor that can proce electricity when we jump and run on it.We don't have this invention yet, but we can still save the energy. My family seldom turn on the lights and let the sunshine come into my house. We should realize that water is important too. In fact, we have much less water than everybody thinks. We can turn off the tap if we don't have to use it. And we can take a short shower instead of having a bath.
Then, it is the paper. Long time ago, my mom often used paper randomly and threw them away though it could be reused. However, now my family is able to use paper in a better way. Every part of it is very helpful for us. We hardly print one side. If it really can't be reused for us, we will recycle the paper.
Last but not least, I hate to buy stuffs with a plastic bag. Surely it is cheap, but it results in white pollution. Why can't we use our own cloth bags?
We have the ability to change the world and this is our responsibility. All of us should do our best to make a better life and I'm sure that it is absolutely not a imagination!
We have a lot of environmental problems these days. And there are actually many things we can do to make a big difference to the world. We can start from living a low carbon life.
You know what? Every day when you go to school by cars, you are polluting the world. You may think that you are only a single person and that doesn’t really matter. However, try to imagine what the world will be when everybody thinks like you. Try to go somewhere on foot. Walking is good for your health. If the place you go is really far, just take the bus.
Beside, you can also use less water and electricity. Here are two really simple things to do: First, turn off the lights and taps. Second, take a shower instead of soaking in the bath. Who are most likely to kill the world? People who are using too much water and electricity.
What’s more, use less paper. If you have no idea about that, never mind, I have a piece of advice for you: use both sides of the paper. For example, I will use the other side of this piece of paper later. Every second, there are trees being cut down and there is paper becoming less and less.
I bet you’ve heard of someone saying like this : "Don’t use plastic bags!” And I also bet you have known this a lot. However, I still have to give you some pieces of advice for dos instead of don'ts. Although there are some plastic bags that can be used again and again today, they are still not the best choice when you are shopping. Buy a cloth bag, that’s quite easy to get one, isn’t it? Stop using plastic bags is really something.
That’s my low carbon life. How about yours? Let the human race work together against pollution. Heal the world, every common man has his obligation.
We have a lot of environmental problems these days. And there are actually many things we can do to make a big difference to the world. We can start from living a low carbon life.
What is low carbon life? For example, if you waste little in your daily life, you are having a low carbon life. But how to do that? I would like to share with you about my low carbon life and how can you do it.
There’s a question: Do you go to school on foot? If you do, you are having a low carbon life. Wait, I’m not encouraging those students who live far away from the school to go to school on foot, but maybe you should try going to school by bus or underground. Well, my home is far away from school, so I go to school by underground and I am seldom late.
Speaking of saving water and electricity, I will always turn off the lights and taps when I don’t need them. That doesn’t sound hard. Some of you might like to take a bath, but for decreasing wasting, I suggest that you have a shower. It is faster and it causes less wasting.
When you’re at school, what should you do? I use both sides of paper at school, I think it’s a good habit. So why don’t you use both sides of paper, just like me? If your classmates make fun of you, don’t be nervous, you’re fighting against pollution!
What’s more, remember to use your own shopping bags instead of plastic bags when you’re buying snacks after school. I eat a lot at school, as a result, I seldom buy snacks after school. But I think it’s difficult for some of you. There is always someone hungry at school!
“Everything is difficult at the beginning ”, don’t give up at first and you’ll find the joy of having a low carbon life!
We have a lot of environmental problems these days. And there are actually many things we can do to make a big difference to the world. We can start from living a low carbon life.
First of all, we should go out by bikes or on foot more but seldom by cars, because vehicle exhaust is the major source of air pollution. Low-carbon transportation is also good for our health, so why not try it?
Next, we should save water and electricity. We should switch off the lights when we don’t use them and reuse the water as possible as we can. For example, the water that your mother uses in washing vegetables can be reused to water plants. That’s a really good way to keep the plants healthy and energetic.
In addition, we should use both sides of a piece of paper in our daily lives. This can rece the use of paper. Paper is valuable for we human beings, isn't it ? So try your best to make full use of it.
What’s more, we should rece the use of disposable wooden things and organize our classmates and friends to plant trees spontaneously on every Arbor Day. Trees are really important for us and they can purify the air. Do something to protect them.
Last but not least, we should stop using plastic bags. Maybe you think that plastic bags are necessary, but they are really bad for the environment and they are also the main cause of white pollution.
There is no doubt that it’s high time that we should live with low carbon to protect the Earth. If I were you, I would do it right know.
We have a lot of environmental problems these days. And there are actually many things we can we do to make a big difference to the world. We can start from living a low carbon life.
We can go to school on foot and this can make the air cleaner and coole. Today a lot of students like to go to school by cars but cars always make a lot of harmful gases. This pollutes the air, so walking to school is a perfect way. Some students' homes are far away from their school, but I think that riding a bike to get to school is a good idea.
Saving water and electricity is also the best way to protect environment. We can turn off the lights and taps if we don’t need to use them.Taking a short shower instead of having a bath. Speaking of water, there are something more we can do. We can use reusable water to plant trees. This will not waste water. People can’t live without water so we must try our best to protect it.
Next, We can use our own bags but not plastic bags. Because plastic bags are difficult to be recycled and they will proce more rubbish and then pollute the air. Air is really important for humans and also important for a lot of creatures. However, people are using factories to proce what they need and this pollutes the air. So we should try our best to close some factories.
Earth is home to all creatures. I can’t imagine that some day we lose the Earth. So please do your best to protect the Earth.
We have a lot of environmental problems these days. And there are actually many things we can we do to make a big difference to the world. We can start from living a low carbon life.
Maybe you’ll be curious about “What is a low-carbon life?” Low-carbon life is a life that can protect the environment. I’m a student who want to protect the environment. So I started to live a Low-carbon life many years ago. I always go to school on foot, but not by car. When I need to print my homework, I always think if there is a way that doesn’t need to print. In the use of paper, I usually write on both sides of a piece of paper. Because the tree is one of the most important resources. During the COVID-19, we often wash our hands. Every time I wash my hands, I turn off the tap when I am using soap. I always turn off the lights when I go out. Every day, I take a shower instead of a bath. Although I seldom go shopping, I always use my shopping bag, because every time you use a plastic bag, it takes thousands of years to dissolve. When I eat out, I never use one-off chopsticks, they are not green.
Those things above must be easy for everyone to do, but few people can stick to it. Of course everybody wants to protect the environment. So let's start from now while it is still not too late !
We have a lot of environmental problems these days. And there are actually many things we can we do to make a big difference to the world. We can start from living a low carbon life.
In my opinion, Low-carbon Life is useful. It not only helps us to save money but also protects the Earth as well.
Now you must want to ask me, what is Low-carbon, right ? I think Low-carbon Life means that you must stop wasting electricity and water. I think Low-carbon is good for us. So what can we do in our daily life to lead a low-carbon life?
First, we must walk to school if our home is close to our school. I can't do it because my home is really far away from school. But I hope you guys can do it.
Next, we must save water and electricity. We must turn off the lights and taps if we don't need them. I can do it very well. My parents always forget to turn off the lights after they use the toilet. So I always remind them. I am careful, right ?
After that, we must save paper ! Why ? Because paper is made from trees. We can't imagine the world without trees. So stop wasting paper please !
Finally, we must stop using plastic bags. We should use our bags to go shopping.
I know all of these are easy for you to complete, aren't they? Let's get started together .
We have a lot of environmental problems these days. And there are actually many things we can we do to make a big difference to the world. We can start from living a low carbon life.
There is no doubt that the Earth is becoming warmer. But no one knows the effects of global warming. I think a low-carbon life will be helpful, and I also stick to it.
In my life, I go to school by bike every day, and I never go to school by car or by taking a taxi. As a matter of fact, I also tell my parents to walk to work instead of driving the car. If I am not using the lights, the TV, the computer, and so on. I would turn them off. I make full use of papers, and I go shopping with baskets rather than plastic bags. Oh, I also plant trees in my family garden, as they absorb carbon dioxide from the air and fresh my spirit when I look at them.
Remember, by getting together, indivials can make a difference. Our contribution counts!
We have a lot of environmental problems these days. And there are actually many things we can we do to make a big difference to the world. We can start from living a low carbon life.
First, we should go to school on foot. If your home far away from school , you can try to ride a bike. Second, don’t use too much water and lights. If we don’t need water and lights, please turn them off. Still, don’t use too much water to wash our bodies. We must always remember turn off the taps. Third, we shouldn’t use too much paper , because if we use much paper, some people have to cut down lots of trees. So the thing is, we can write on both sides of a piece of paper. Fourth, don’t use plastic things. For example, plastic bags and plastic bottles. If you use plastic things, remember not to throw them on the ground. It will pollute the Earth. We must throw plastic in rubbish bin. I think I got it, how about you?
In fact, Earth is ill because of human’s destroying. We cut down many of the trees. Therefore, many animals, birds and insects lost their homes. I think maybe one day, we will lose our home too. So , please do our best to protect the Earth !
Let us lead a Low-carbon life ! It’s time for the Earth to have a rest .
We have a lot of environmental problems these days. And there are actually many things we can we do to make a big difference to the world. We can start from living a low carbon life.
In order to live a low-carbon life, we must start with small things. For example, when we go to school, we can go to school on foot or by bike, or at least take a bus. When we are at home, we need to use less water, and we also need to remind ourselves that we should use less water for bathing. I personally suggest that we should not take a bath because it will waste a lot of water. We should rece the use of electricity at home as well. When we don't need electricity, turn off all the lights. What else can we do ? We need to save paper in order to live a low-carbon life. We need to use both the front and the back of a piece of paper. By the way, do not use plastic bags when buying vegetables. We can prepare our own shopping bags. And we can do many other things, such as participating in tree planting activities.
As you can see, low carbon life starts from small things.
在编辑你们这些文章的时候，我真心觉得，你们还是很会写的！Soooooo...proud of you guys! 不要停下你们手中的笔，一直写下去吧，你们一定会越写越好的！
